can anyone help with banner layout please?

[Jill Marie Welsh]

Hi.
You certainly have plenty going on there.
It’s a lot to digest at one glance.
I like to break banners up into panels, as I have done below.
In my opinion you need more contrast and less info.
Not to sound snotty, but I’m tired of that balloon font!
Love….Jill

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[Robert Lambie]

jills right, a bit too much going on at once mate…

where will the banner be situated & veiwing distance?
is the banner meant more as an advert to promote the time in business or is it for a party/celebration?
will the banner be in cut vinyl or digi print?

just some questions i need to ask before commenting.

[Stephen Ingham]

Hi robert, i have posted a revised banner

the banner is to be placed under a light box, so no need to put the company name on anymore

the banner is to be designed more to announce the length of time in business.

It will be produced on our versacamm and printed

cheers
stephen

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[Jill Marie Welsh]

Come into my parlour, Stephen.
It is time for your spanking!
You are a naughty naughty little sign boy.
NEVER EVER use all-caps in Brush Script!!!!!!
:banghead:
I know it looks “fancy” but it is a major no-no.
Decorative fonts are usually meant to be used with caps and lower case letters.
And you still need more contrast.
Love….Jill

[Stephen Ingham]

thanks jill, i’ll redo the caps bit, no problems

however, what do you mean more contrast?? unfortunately i don’t have a graffic designers eye, any advise or suggestions would be appreciated.

as for coming into your parlour!! i think you are a little far for me to travel for a spanking!!

cheers
stephen

[Jill Marie Welsh]

As to contrast, what I mean is,
your banner has a white background.
Yellow is not a strong enough color to show up on its own
without a big-ass black outline to punch it up.
You have a lot of fonts going on as well.
Just because your system has lots of fonts doesn’t mean you need to use each one on everything.
Find one nice bold font and one nice script and use those.

Red lettering, contrary to popular belief, is hard to read on white.
Black, dark green, or blue are more legible.
Try to stay away from outlining red in black withour a white offset in between.
(not that you’ve done that but I think you are gonna)

On my idea, I used the reverse panel method.
(Using a dark blue panel with the info cut out,
making the background color be the lettering color)
You could try that in the middle portion of the banner once you take out the HAPPY BIRTHDAYS.
Sorry for going on, I am just trying to help.
Next time I’m over there I may still paddle you with my mahlstick!
Thanks for being a good sport.
Love….Jill